Eleanor sat in the silence. Outside, snow began to fall.
Read your text aloud. If it sounds like a corporation wrote it, burn it. It should sound like a human being speaking across a dinner table.
In his published works, Ogilvy is a gentleman. In the unpublished PDF, he is a prosecutor. You will find a memo where he lambasts a $500,000 campaign that won a Clio award but didn't move product.